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Re: it's cold where you left me
Hello dreamwalker, I'm Rose (just one among many in this place). I like your style, probably (selfishly) because your stream-of-consciousness rhythm resonates a bit with my own. I have a ...
Jun 21, 2012 -
Re: Empty
Hello inkwell. Nice. Good. I'm liking it. However... The air is a billowing thicket of acrylic heat This line sounded nice, but "billowing thicket" just didn't seem right once I ...
Oct 15, 2011 -
Re: Autumn
Hello there, bonnie babe! Decent little poem you've got here, let's take a look, shall we? If only I were young, I'd try my best to catch them. I suppose ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: Hidden, Buried, Forgotten
Hello there! My name is Rose and I will be your literary surgeon for the day. :) So, diving right in... Poems should not be cryptic or mysterious. They should ...
Oct 13, 2011 -
Re: All Hath (Rated 12+ for intenseness)
Hey Golden! Mmmm....So. I kind of like this. Overall, that is. What I don't like: ...Seriously silent You can do better! Alliteration is nice, but not for its own sake. ...
Dec 11, 2010 -
Re: Clementine
Hiya Clem! This was alright. Well-executed vocabulary, although I disliked the fact that you used "spheroid" twice. The first stanza was my favorite, and I loved: (Clementine cries that she ...
Dec 11, 2010 -
Re: A Different Kind of Gold
hey coral! senorita rosa here to be your reviewer! so this is my first review in a long time, i'm a bit rusty, so bear with me. i liked this ...
Dec 10, 2010 -
Re: ded men
Eva! It's been far too long! I love this piece! Your language (and maybe not word use so much as dialect and grammar) is very evocative...like Lumi mentioned, it paints ...
Nov 9, 2010 -
Re: Familial
I almost love your short stories...I adore your poetry, though. I almost wished your story would flow better, but that was just my first impression. On second thought, I liked ...
Sep 1, 2010 -
Re: Pieta
Hey there! Great job! I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Your allusions were subtle, too subtle at times for the average reader (for example, "Once, you winged his shoulderblade"). I absolutely ...
Apr 5, 2010 -
Re: The Pyromaniac
Hello Ace! My name is Rose and I shall be reviewing your work this morning. It is no stress reliever or hobby. I would reword this as "It is not ...
Apr 5, 2010 -
Re: The Vessel of my Mind
Greetings, Nibroc! I positively adored this poem, especially the first stanza. Actually, I loved all of it. I like the punctuation throughout. THE VESSEL OF MY MIND By Nibroc I ...
Apr 3, 2010 -
Re: Yours Truly
Hey there! I liked it...overall quite a good poem. The imagery was fantastic. However, I had a slight problem with "Your small, cute nose." The simplicity of this line didn't ...
Mar 18, 2010 -
Re: .
Hello Auteur...nice to read this. First off, being a grammar freak, I must comment on that issue. Please insert apostrophes where needed, and yes I know this is meant to ...
Jan 29, 2010 -
Re: The End of a Dream
Hello... First off, you spelled cemetery wrong. That bothers your readers to no end, trust me. Secondly, I thought your poem had some potential, but it didn't flow. You should ...
Jan 27, 2010
